Revised Introduction

In this post I will be revising the introduction from my rhetorical analysis essay draft.

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I think that my second Introduction is much more successful. One reason that I believe this is because I actually followed the "Tips for Introductions" from the textbook. I think that these tips helped me a lot when creating a new conclusion. I feel that my old conclusion doesn't really address the rubric for project 2. The first introduction addresses the issue presented in my authors article which is wrong. The new introduction addresses the arguments that were used by the author of my article which suits the project 2 rubric much better.


My Old Introduction
Becoming a doctor has always been one of the highest esteemed jobs that one could achieve. For years and years only the most motivate, smartest, top of the class students were able to progress to medical school and become doctors. The requirements are supreme and the dedication is plenty too much, but is the payout worth it? Many would say yes based on the preconceived notions that becoming a physician is a gallant job that pays well but most physicians from the 20th century would disagree. Sandeep Jauhar, MD speaks to a greater audience of prospective medical students about his own experiences in the medical field. Using diction and tone to express his heavily opinionated thoughts Jauhar discusses why becoming a doctor was not a great decision. He backs up his opinions by using statistics and expert opinion to appeal to the readers logical thinking.


My Revised Introduction

What if I told you that becoming a doctor would be the worst decision of your life? There are many different strategies that an author can implement to persuasively convey their argument. They can use diction and tone to appeal to credibility, facts and examples to appeal to emotions and statistics and expert opinions to appeal to logic. It is important to understand the rhetorical strategies that are used to make arguments in certain text for two main reasons. Understanding when and why specific strategies are being used can help you successfully develop your own arguments in the future as well as educate you to allow you to make better decisions about the credibility of the work. This paper will explore the many rhetorical strategies that author Sandeep Jauhar uses in his article, "Why Doctors Are Sick of Their Profession". It will argue that, despite the possibility of bias, Jauhar successfully asserts his credibility and implements specific rhetorical strategies that allow him to create a well organized and strong argument about the reasons why he, along with many other doctors no longer enjoy their job as they once did. Sandeep Jauhar, MD speaks to a greater audience of prospective medical students and patients about his own experiences in the medical field. Using diction and tone to express his heavily opinionated thoughts, Jauhar discusses why becoming a doctor is not a great decision. He backs up his opinions by using statistics and expert opinion to appeal to the readers logical thinking.